You can write love poems—even good ones—for specific women as long as you don’t expect the words to work. Because they don’t.
I have a friend who already has self-published one small book of love poems. The cover looks cool, it looks like a real book, but the poems within are the opposite of good: riddled with clichés and trite expressions like dead bats hung on a clothesline of pretension.
Worst of all, they beg.
A wise woman already knows a man who confesses to love her is completely vulnerable, no matter how tough he acts. Supplicating makes a man seem weak. Really, if you want to do well with women, remember they are Klingons at heart. The few that have hearts, ha ha.
Sad to say the woman my poor friend Can’t Live Without™ whom he’s known for years, is an Asshole, a sanctimonious, “spiritual” cruella who hates him for some reason he’s never quite explained. Judging from the fury of her words, you’d think he raped her and left her for dead; I think he deceived her about something, but nothing close to cheating on her.
I’d offered to edit his first manu, but halfway through he up and self-published it, full of spelling errors and all.
I suicidally offered to edit the 2nd one and heard nothing more about it. Then out of nowhere, last week he asked if I’d looked at it. When I told him I never got the file he flipped, then sent it.
Now I’ve flipped.
Love Manuscript #2, aka More of the Same, almost 140 pages of short-yet-hard-to-stomach poems. I don’t even envy the prodigious output, it’s all terrible. I’m trying like hell to make his stuff work, but secretly I hope he ignores my editing. I love my friend and hate his needless suffering, and not because I have to suffer his poopoetry. If I could magically erase the cruella’s horrible personality and reprogram her or create a magical fuckbot in her image, I would. I’ve already dared tell him in a 500-words-or-less essay why I think this woman is a disaster, that even if she saned-up he still has no future with her and should be glad for it. But he can’t listen to reason any more than his poems can un-suck: the poor SOB is in love.
Some people are just fucking machochists, I guess. Like me, trying to turn shit into chocolate cake.
(If you ever find this blog, my friend, you’ll have to forgive me. You’ve suffered enough).
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Friday, 4 April 2008 at 2:58 pm |
Now you know what it’s like to edit shit, eh? Ha ha ha. Man, what a loser this guy is. No disrespect to him but to waste his time writing this lovey dovey shit is not only insanity at it’s worst but makes men look extremely bad. In love. The two worst words in the English language.
Saturday, 5 April 2008 at 1:26 am |
Have a little compassion. Love is a sickness but there’s no reason to be nasty …your ‘disrespect’ could never be as bad as what he’s doing to himself.
Yes, I disapprove of his target…as for the means, if ‘poopetry’ is the only way he can get the poison out, so be it. Wasting his time? Mayhaps, but don’t you already claim life is a waste of time anyway?
Sunday, 6 April 2008 at 11:42 am |
Yes, it’s a waste of time. And I can’t wait until my time is up, brozizzle.
As for compassion I leave that for only Mother Nature’s creatures and wonders.
Humans? FUCK’EM, RIGHT IN THE NECK.
Friday, 11 April 2008 at 9:35 pm |
Motel Todd says, “Women don’t give a shit about poetry. They want cash, not necessarily directly, but for gifts, movies, dinner, shoes and etc. Then maybe if he made a decent impression she MAY contemplate sex with him. That’s why I respect the ladies of the evening more. It’s a direct transaction. You both get what you want. You get sex and she gets money. Done deal.”
Friday, 11 April 2008 at 10:17 pm |
I’m down with the hookers but when I write a love poem I mean it, and I always have a particular broad in mind. If the rest of the broads like the words then I’ve spread my money around instead of investing it all on one.
Both of you have eaten the fugu of love and though you’ve survived you’re still partially paralyzed. Living without some kind of connection is like being color blind while surrounded by flowers at Sunken Gardens.